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A Valentine's Haiku by @Thorvald (El Thorvaldo)

Done for the Show Your Heart project on DeviantArt. Turns out if you want to do a haiku properly, you need to know how specific words and phrases evoke particular seasonal periods. Not sure if I clinched the kireji, but I've never been much of a poet. =P

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[Originally submitted to DeviantArt February 2019]

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Posted: Tuesday, 15 August, 2023 @ 09:09 PM
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Kireji are cutting words used to affect the rhythm of the haiku, often providing a pause or break to a line so that words can be juxtaposed. It is a very tricky feature to emulate in English. The word you're thinking of for seasons is kigo. And, for English, I think you did fine.

Posted: Tuesday, 15 August, 2023 @ 09:33 PM

@fragmented_imagination: yey :3

I wish I could remember where I found the guide that informed this: it either featured or linked to a saijiki, and being a pedantic perfectionist I haven't dared haikus without it since.

Posted: Wednesday, 16 August, 2023 @ 12:30 AM

@Thorvald: If you're talking about kigo, I went on the Internet and found this.

Posted: Wednesday, 16 August, 2023 @ 06:31 PM

@fragmented_imagination: Nice, it's not the page I found but the list is familiar.

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