Bren Bren at Din Din by @Valesse (Internal Conflict)
I would say that this is finished if I didn't hate it so badly. There is something missing about the chest region and it isn't another shirt. hmpt. In other news, the rose and the hands are peeeerfect, and me loveles them greatly. The end!
Excellent, EXCELLENT shading in this piece! It's absolutely magnificent! The character's pose is very nice as well, but I do agree with you on the chest area--it needs more lines. Try looking at one of the How to Draw Manga books--even if you try to go for a more humanoid than anime style, they are very helpful when it comes to simplified anatomy. I also think a bit more of a background would work well on this--the white space is a bit much and distracting. Oh! And don't forget to keep your lineart sharp. Don't let it blend in too much with the pencils!